Friday, 11 January 2008

the ghostly highwayman

In the deep deep dark spookly dark wood the high wayman
came spookly in night He had a french crocked hat
with a sparkle gun and sowrd.
He gidied up to the old inn DOOR!!!!!!!!!!

The blackeyed daughter was platting a red not in her hair.
But who was waiting there!!!!!!!!
It was THE HIGHWAYMAN!!!!!!!!

After the highway man said don't worey I
will be back at moonlight nothing can make me stop.

I will be back tomorrow he said.


tim told the king that he will be back by midenight

so came to the in yard door

bess got tied up and strong saltape on her mouth they hide beside her bed
they WaITED FOR HIM!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

BESS GOT HER FINGER OUT AND SHOT HER SELF!!!!!!!!


The highwayman came and saw bess get dead.

he got his horse up and shouted really loudly like this RAAAAAAAAAAAAA.

and he got shot.

then when there was no one there bess and the highwayman ghostly woke up and
and huged.

and lived happily ever after


by ameera and lois

3 comments:

Mr Lea said...

First of all, I loved the title, before I even started reading your poem I was excited about what might happen.
I think you have done really well in telling the reader the story by using short verses and lines. The poem moves very quickly through the story plot and this keeps the reader really interested.
At times I think you could have put in some more details, like who was Tim, and why was he an important character?
This is a good piece of work, well done you two!

Us Lot said...

tO aMEARA
I LOVE IT

Us Lot said...

ameera and lois,


This is a nice story but boring.
Keep going 8 baller!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!





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